More and more people want to buy famous brands ofclothes, carsand other items. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
It is undeniable that brands have taken a part in our community, Some people are wearing expensive clothes
for showing
off and others seek high quality. I think that Change preposition
to show
This
statement has a double-edged sword which has advantages and disadvantages.
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firstly
, research has found that nations are more likely to buy expensive shoes, t-shirts and hoods no matter the price Linking Words
due to
fashion purposes. Linking Words
This
issue Linking Words
is
significantly increased in the past years, which affect the behaviour of human being. Verb problem
has
For example
, most of the residents are attracted to what famous actors wear without thinking about it no matter if the quality is low. Linking Words
This
issue would lead to spending money on unessential stuff, So other essential items can't be reachable because of having any more money. Linking Words
Furthermore
, some nations wear famous brands to show off that they are rich and they think that they will get respect from others.
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secondly
, their one thing for certain that we can not deny , there Linking Words
is
a few numbers of good brands that serve good quality and quantity items Correct subject-verb agreement
are
such
as excellent fabric and nice design. Linking Words
However
, purchasing the good stuff is not a bad idea the bad idea is Linking Words
to do
the consumer needs these items for their own goods or only for being a model. Verb problem
whether
For instance
, in ,Japan people are controlling the companies and forcing them to produce high and perfect products Linking Words
instead
of providing only fashion style.
In conclusion, I think clothes are something to cover our bodies not to pretend another personality and wear masks of other people. donate the money for something you need, not for what you want.Linking Words
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Task Response
The essay lacks a clear and well-structured response to the prompt. It does not effectively address the reasons for the increasing popularity of famous brands and does not fully explore whether this is a positive or negative development.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay lacks a clear and coherent structure, with some ideas being presented in a confusing and disjointed manner. The introduction and conclusion are not strong, and the essay could benefit from a more logical flow of ideas.