More and more people want to buy famous brands ofclothes, carsand other items. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

It is undeniable that brands have taken a part in our community, Some people are wearing expensive clothes
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off and others seek high quality. I think that
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, research has found that nations are more likely to buy expensive shoes, t-shirts and hoods no matter the price
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significantly increased in the past years, which affect the behaviour of human being.
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, most of the residents are attracted to what famous actors wear without thinking about it no matter if the quality is low.
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issue would lead to spending money on unessential stuff, So other essential items can't be reachable because of having any more money.
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, some nations wear famous brands to show off that they are rich and they think that they will get respect from others.
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a few numbers of good brands that serve good quality and quantity items
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as excellent fabric and nice design.
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, purchasing the good stuff is not a bad idea the bad idea is
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the consumer needs these items for their own goods or only for being a model.
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, in ,Japan people are controlling the companies and forcing them to produce high and perfect products
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of providing only fashion style. In conclusion, I think clothes are something to cover our bodies not to pretend another personality and wear masks of other people. donate the money for something you need, not for what you want.
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The essay lacks a clear and well-structured response to the prompt. It does not effectively address the reasons for the increasing popularity of famous brands and does not fully explore whether this is a positive or negative development.
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The essay lacks a clear and coherent structure, with some ideas being presented in a confusing and disjointed manner. The introduction and conclusion are not strong, and the essay could benefit from a more logical flow of ideas.
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