In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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upbringing plays a vital role in a society and parents and others should take it into consideration seriously. It is suggested that
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must be taught that if they try hard they can succeed in everything.
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since decisiveness is one of the most attitudes with
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, in some Nations people believe that
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should encourage to be decisive and determined and tell
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who try hard can certainly reach achievements.
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approach makes them hard-working and learn them to struggle with tough
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and never give up in the face of problems and tough situations. In fact,
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who have learned to try hard are more likely to succeed during their life from childhood to
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and it gives them a chance to try in the absence of thinking about discrimination and
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.
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, if
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grew up in underprivileged
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be trained to try under any circumstances, They are prone to become
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because they know by trying hard they can overcome all obstacles
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as Financial issues.
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education makes
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Brave and Powerful.
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, despite having some advantages to
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for trying hard, They should never be promised to achieve anything.
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think they can reach whatever they want
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trying if they fail in their work and their life they will miss their self-esteem.
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all top universities by studying hard, after rejection they became
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and it will be a big
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for them and they
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it.
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, they can not confide their talent.
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should encourage to be determined and try hard so that no one can stop them from achieving their goals, it has
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effect on their
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, they should be told it is possible to fail and if any possibility
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is
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not only they should not give up but
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they should try more.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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