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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Residing in a nation where you can't speak your
language
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 and you have to speak a different
language
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 can result in severe social and practical difficulties. I think it can cause various issues both, a lack of confidence and depression. Many
people
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 in Asian countries are moving towards Western countries. They have to adjust to a new society by meeting new
people
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 and making
friends
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, but it will require communication and if a person did not know how to speak their specific
language
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, it will result in a lack of confidence and understanding.
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, many
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 in my country mostly youngsters are moving to Korea for earning handsome salaries, but some of them did not know how to speak the Korean
language
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. So, most of them are not able to communicate with their customers and clients and it results in their business failure.
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, having good
friends
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 is a great blessing but making
friends
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 will ultimately become difficult for a person who did not know how to communicate with them. If a person who did not have any
friends
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 it will cause them problems
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 as depression and anxiety.
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, the IELTS examination is required in most Western countries to study at their dream university and even for work, but most
people
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 in Asia use illegal methods to get admission by making fake documents. They will not score higher or better in their universities because of their poor
language
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 skills.
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, speaking different languages can cause various difficulties. Lack of confidence and understanding results in depression and causes various other problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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