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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line charts elucidate the information of three electrical appliances ownership and housework duration by a weekly
period
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 in a country over a century counted in percentage and
hours
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.
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, it can be seen that over the
period
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 as a whole, the number of electrical device ownership rose in all three tools.
Nevertheless
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, some deflation occurred in the total duration of household activity. Of the three devices displayed on the graph, the proportion of refrigerators and washing machines which were owned stood at just over 0 and precisely two-fifths,
whereas
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 approximately 30 per
cent
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 of
vacuum
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 cleaners. What is striking in
this
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 graph is the gradual growth of refrigerators and
vacuum
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 cleaners possession from well above 50 per
cent
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 and a half in 1940, to exactly 100 and 90 per
cent
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 in 1980.
Subsequently
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, the rate of washing machine ownership fell slightly to just above three-fifths in the same
period
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, which meant that it acquired far less than
vacuum
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 cleaners. Surprisingly, in the following
period
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, refrigerator and
vacuum
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 cleaner trends are in most respects quite similar.
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, the rate of washing machine proprietorship peaked at roughly 70 per
cent
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at the end
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 of the
period
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. Turning now to the other graph, the number of household activity duration reached a high of a half, which was followed by a trough of approximately 32
hours
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 during 1940.
Next,
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there was an approximate drop of 9
hours
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 in 1960 and 2019 from 20
hours
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 to around 11
hours
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, hours, cent, vacuum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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