Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss these both views and give your opinion.

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some
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components
attach credence to
homework
giving isn’t beneficial, others think that it’s a matter of
life
and death to improve
children’s
discipline.
Although
,
homework
is very popular at schools and the learners believes that it improves
children’s
grade and their educational
life
. In my
opinion
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homework
is an appropriate way to improve children in their school
life
. Beyond any doubt,
homework
is a method to improve
children’s
grades at the
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institution
they’re affiliated with. Whatever subject they learn in school,
teacher
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the teacher
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of that subject gives an unsolved paper or
an
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specific page range related to the things that they learn from
students
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question bank. When the
students
studies
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on their
homework
, they
automaticaly
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automatically
review their related
topic
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topics
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.
Due to
their reviewing most of them gets high grades at whatever they’re studying for.
On the other hand
, some tutors believe that doing
homework
is tutoring
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children’s
minds. Most of the
students
only have a few hours left after school to chill out or spend time with their
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families
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. If they spend their time
on
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doing
homework
, there is no time left to relax.
As a result
, they may have seen some psychological disorders and trauma
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their daily
life
.
According to
an article,
students
in South Korea, are having the most hard conditions and struggling with their educational
life
.
Also
a huge amount of
students
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antidepressant
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in their day-to-day
life
. In conclusion, some people believe that
homework
should not be given to children. Others
,
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say that
homework
is
an
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significant way to improve
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the academic
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results of
students
.
Howewer
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However
, beyond any doubt
homework
is a required and a running method that
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available
in
students
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educational
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instills discipline
  • Deepen understanding
  • Independent learning
  • Reinforcement
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum insight
  • Burnout
  • Student stress
  • Leisure time
  • Relevance of assignments
  • Project-based learning
  • Interactive learning
  • Individual learning styles
  • Conducive study environment
  • Homework policy
  • Balanced approach
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