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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at early stage. Punishment is necessary to help them learn the difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children

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There is a common belief that it is significant to learn the divergence between correct and incorrect in childhood. I totally agree with
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 condition and
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 essay would discuss what are the reasons to agree and which types of punishments should allow to aware of their good behaviour.
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, I would like to express my main reason to agree with
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 statement. It is important to support an early age
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 to choose right and wrong things. In
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 situation, as parents or teachers, we have to punish them in a proper manner to teach all sides of immoral situations.
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, 65% of parents in Asian Countries, are impressing to hide their
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's faults.
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,
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 cannot learn the right awareness through faults.
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, there are several types of punishments. One of them is physical
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.
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,
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 kind of
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 cannot recommend
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 some younger do not have adequate tolerance capacity and it may be impacted them mentally.
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, if someone wants to give a minor
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, it should not give in public areas.
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, advices are the best way of
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 in my thinking.
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, if some
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 did a
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, give advice with examples to learn lessons through the
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, if they are doing the same
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 ,again and again, elders can warn them. If they are not ready to be good,
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, can choose suitable minor physical
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, cannot give advice to kids (below 5 years old) to punish because they cannot understand. By the way, we can choose a place in your home or nursery and name it a naughty corner. When kids make the wrong things, you can place them in the naughty corner sometimes.
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, elders have a good knowledge of how to handle their
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 and which type of
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 should give particular
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