Some people think that the government is wasting money on arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. Discuss your own views and give your opinion.

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the Philippines is now categorized as a developing

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more wisely in different industries. Artists

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a larger entity or a big company to have your own exhibit. Oftentimes, Filipino artists, having an ordinary or a poor background will not

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is planning to have a subsidy and loan to help our local artists. On the other hand, there are other issues that our

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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299 words

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Some people think that the government is wasting money on arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. Discuss your own views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think that individuals are becoming more dependent on each other in modern society, while others believe that individuals are becoming more independent of each other. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some universities offer online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Government should spend tax money on public libraries rather than public transportation improvements. To what extent do you agree with this statement?