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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

#life #technology
It is a point of debate that the more basic
technology
 was, the more elevated our living standards were. Undoubtedly,
this
 notion remains
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 in keeping
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against
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. The upcoming paragraphs will shed light on my arguments related to
labour
 savings and learning chances given by advanced
equipments
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,
then
 will lead to a logical conclusion. The first and foremost evidence for
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 influences of
technology
 on life is that technological outbreaks have revolutionised the way how residents work. In simple words, machines and
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 have now performed operations that used to take a wide variety of our efforts,
times
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 and resources.
Moreover
, manufacturable factories have had substitutes for human
labour
 by modern machines.
Beside
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, most of
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 communication tools have been replaced by advanced offices,
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. These changes have created considerable
labour
 savings and improved productivity extremely.
Secondly
, it is obvious that
technology
 not only improves work productivity and efficiency but it
also
 provides us with a range of useful knowledge.
In addition
, if we have a stock of available information, we can learn and work more effectively.
For instance
, students can search and study anything on social networking sites
such
 as Youtube,
therefore
 getting degrees online can become
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.
This
 is evidence
for
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 how
technology
 creates conditions for
human
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humans
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 and makes knowledge more accessible. In conclusion, our lives have been improved remarkably by technological development, especially
labour
 savings and learning opportunities provided by modern
equipments
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equipment
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.
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