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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and imagination than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

#activity #child #skills #imagination
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recent times
activities
 that are in favour of a child are becoming more productive
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 of developing skills
such
 as imagination than reading some kinds of books or journals and etc. Many individuals consider that
this
 way is much
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better,
while
 others oppose
this
 idea, and I partially agree with
this
 statement. The objective of
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a childs'
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childs'
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 skills development. On the one
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 reading can
also
 develop
skill
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skills
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such
 as fast understanding.
In other words
, by reading different materials
children
 can be
thaught
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 how to get the information with
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 understanding and imagine it in their
head
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heads
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.
For instance
,
while
 reading a book
kid
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kids
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 always invent
the
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 story with pictures in
his
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their
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 brain.
Consequently
,
this
 technique might be one of the effective ways of evolving.
On the other hand
, doing things
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which kids relish might be more successful. It means that
children
 will not be forced
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 something. As an example of
this
, every person
enjoy
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 their hobbies and combining pleasant
activities
 with improving skills is better than forcing them to read something not by their own wish, it is
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considered
 that not every
children
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child
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wants
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 to read
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 because
in
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 their age they have a desire to play with toys, to paint and colour drawings and etc.
Hence
, it is better to give a choice to the child to do what he relishes.
To sum up
, all the aforementioned points
children
 must do
activities
 that they want and not be compelled to do something. As far as I am concerned, if
entertaing
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entertaining
activities
 had been done by kids, every child would be delighted by learning new things.
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