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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be diverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of diverless vehicles outweighs the disadvantage.

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It is generally expected that as technology has developed over the
last
 decades, robots or some kind of software will take over
drivers
' roles and control all kinds of transport in the forthcoming years.
However
, individuals can witness both the benefits and drawbacks of
this
 trend.
To begin
 with,
driverless
 cars, buses and trucks are becoming more and more common in our lives and
this
 case can provide people with plenty of opportunities and comfort. I mean that commuters or
passengers
 are capable of reaching their destinations on time
as well as
 travelling safely in these types of vehicles.
According to
 a recent survey in the UK,
driverless
 automobiles follow traffic rules more accurately than traditional
drivers
,
as a result
, the number of road accidents is significantly decreasing and it can
also
 prevent daily traffic jams at a high pace.
Additionally
, disabled people and handicappers can go wherever they want with the help of
such
 autos. That's why most individuals are welcoming
this
 tendency throughout the world.
Nonetheless
, it is admitted that there are
also
 some disadvantages to
this
 point of view. First of all, it can cause unemployment among
drivers
, namely, they lose their daily income since
passengers
 prefer using
driverless
 ones.
For instance
, in our country, most part of the society depends on earning money by being taxi
drivers
. If they were unemployed, they could not only support their families but
also
 meet their needs.
Secondly
, it is unreliable and its system may be out of order at any time.
Consequently
,
passengers
 can get into trouble and miss their important meetings, appointments and so on.
Finally
,
driverless
 cars are not able to communicate with commuters or
passengers
 as real
drivers
. In conclusion,
whereas
driverless
 vehicles are spreading widely in developed countries, I strongly believe that it would not be fair to replace
drivers
 with them,
therefore
, there should be a balance between the two preferences.
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task response
To improve your task response, ensure that you address all parts of the prompt by providing a clear opinion on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Your conclusion should reflect a more definite stance in line with the task requirements.
coherence cohesion
Enhance coherence and cohesion by linking ideas more smoothly between paragraphs. Use a wider range of linking devices to create a seamless flow. Make sure your ideas are organized in a logical sequence that readers can easily follow.
task response
To further support your main points, incorporate more detailed and specific examples. These can be hypothetical scenarios, statistics, or studies that clearly illustrate your arguments and make them more convincing.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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