The top pritority of businesses is making money,and they do not need to have social responsibilities.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The top priority of
businesses
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is making
money
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and they do not need to have piblic responsibilities in social
life
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.The writer disagree with
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opinion and will write the reason I disagree with it. On th one hand,the top priority of
businesses
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made a lots of
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for social
life
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and many company in their
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,they
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play a very important role in social
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.Companies not only have to spend expenses
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as hiring personnel,premises,legal,and insurance.
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investors and
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generating incom are the top priority.
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the US,a small business or a company play a role in social
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,they
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give many chance for
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to create job opportunities.So the fact,they have to be socially responsible in an exception because the amount generated and the amount of
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for
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to invest is quite large.
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,there is no distinction between individuals and
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regarding their ethical responsibilities.Eventhough,they making
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for the public and their
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to make boost the systems of the
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or they utilise the important role in the public,they do not have social responsibilities is a mistake in every
people
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.Every
people
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in town or
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must have responsible for their town or
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to make it better and better.
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,the Vietnamese YouTube channel:"MixiGaming" has received enthusiatic from both Vietnamese and South Africa.In the recordings,Mixi and his team make a charity for
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in South Africa to donate
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,food,clothes and toys for children,they
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spend a lots of
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to build a small school for childern to study and learn.They proved that it is more humanitarian for
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to contribute to society than maximize revenue,they do not care what about they spend or they will recieve from
people
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who they help,they just want to see
people
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happy and smiling in their face. In conslusion, i think
people
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in their society must have public responsibilties to make their
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better and will increase in the future.They make
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for social but they must
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care about the
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around them.A liitle bit care can make
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happier and they will respect us,help us if we need,a saying that says:"A good person will have a good
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,it not come yet but it will come to you soon".
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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