The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days.

The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days.
The supplied bar graph illustrates the index of residents visiting the cinema on various days in three years ( 2003, 2005 and 2007) in European countries. Units are measured in percentage.
Overall
, it is obvious that going to films shows higher percentages on Fridays and weekdays. It is noteworthy, that the cinema visitors remained absolutely the same for 3 various years on Fridays. it is conspicuous that, going to films  culminated at approximately 45% on Saturdays, the highest of any day in three years whilst there was a plateau almost identical by under 15% between Mondays and Thursdays, except for Tuesdays in 2015. It is interesting to note, that cinema visitors on Wednesdays presented an all-time low index at just above 7,5% throughout the week, in 2007.
In contrast
, the percentage of going to a movie theatre in 2003 is been unsurpassed on Tuesdays, Wednesdays and Thursdays over the period commencing from 2003 to 2007.
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