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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on global scale while other believes it is better to deal with national level. Discuss both the views and state your opinion.

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With the increasing issues that are brought about
climate
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by climate
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 change, many people agree that it is enough to just take national precautions to control these environmental
problems
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,
while
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 others believe that it is of paramount importance to deal with
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 on an international scale. I would argue that it is necessary to first control and adjust these issues on a national level because some
countries
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 have a bigger share in
this
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 matter than others.
To begin
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 with, environmental issues are affecting everyone over the world.
However
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, in today's world, the existing solutions are mostly national or in collusion with several
countries
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.
For instance
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, the agreement made in Paris to reduce CO2 emissions in 2050, which a lot of
countries
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 in Europe and Africa are part of, is a good example of it. These
countries
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 started
on
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national-level actions and made plans to reduce CO2 in different sectors. For the Netherlands, it was important to adapt the housing built in the past to green energy sources, because the built environment is 40% responsible for these environmental
problems
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.
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, the Netherlands made the parking costs much more expensive, pushing people to use
more
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other transport like trains.
This
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 is
due to
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 the big advantage of the environment that collective transport brings. Despite that, these national measurements have a good strategy that
countries
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 can decide where the solution should rise from, there are many people who would argue that global measurements are necessary.
Due to
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 the effect of global warming on an international scale, it may seem logical that small
countries
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 with varied solutions, will not be effective. Everyone working on the same plan,and the same rules will push
countries
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 that may not have any effects on these
problems
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, to pay the costs of reversing it.
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, most
countries
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 in Africa. still live in a really sustainable way. The food, housing, and cars are in smaller amounts than in other small
countries
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 in Europe. The economic status of African regions is not too developed, and
therefore
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 not the ones that affected the environment negatively.
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, these
countries
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 may not have enough money to be part of the solutions.
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, these
countries
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 are usually the most suffering from the effects of these environmental
problems
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.
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, the flooding in Libya
last
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 year was
due to
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 climate change.
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, the most pollutant
countries
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 are in Europe and America.
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 I do believe that national rules are needed and the only possible way to correctly adjust the core of the problem. In conclusion, solving the environmental cause needs to be on a national scale, where each country takes responsibility for fixing the issue. The goal is global but needs more in small pieces resolved.

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Improvement
Ensure that your introduction clearly states the two views you are going to discuss, and briefly introduces your opinion at the end for clarity.
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Use more linking words and phrases to connect ideas smoothly, improving coherence throughout the essay.
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Provide more detailed explanations and examples to strengthen your argument and support your points.
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Make sure to have a clear balance in discussing both views before stating your opinion to show an evenly weighted argument.
Strength
The introduction and conclusion are well-presented, setting a clear frame for the discussion.
Strength
You provide relevant examples, such as the Paris Agreement and specific actions like housing adaptation in the Netherlands.
Strength
Your points are clearly articulated and show a good understanding of the topic.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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