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" Today developed countries are increasing the number of tourist industries. Why it is happening? What are the benefits of this situation?"

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In today's modern era, numerous countries can benefit from international finances to develop their countries well being. The Parlament can access support from different nations in order to change their
country
's economic status and so on. In
this
 essay, I will argue the advantages of the increasing
number
 of
tourists
 and the consequences of
this
 situation.
To begin
 with, numerous people adore to travel around the globe and discover new places with significant culture and
due to
 that the
number
 of
tourists
 that visit another
nation
 is increasing.
For instance
, a
country
 can improve their economic status by having
tourists
 that are looking for a
place
 to sleep and buy souvenirs and by ,that the
country
's culture, historical and natural places are promoted to different folks which would make them visit the
country
also
, and with numerous
tourists
 visiting the
country
, the infrastructure of the
country
 has been renovated and modernize it. With
tourists
 visiting the
nation
, there have been a
number
 of cultural exchanges between the society and
tourists
, which will help the community to have an open mind about others' cultures.
On the other hand
, numerous
tourists
 visiting a
place
 can damage the ecosystem,
due to
 the fact that
tourists
 leave behind them a
number
 of trash that can destroy the beauty of a city.
For example
, the villagers might be upset with the overcrowded
tourists
 that are visiting,
due to
 the fact that they can produce damage to the
place
 they are trying to visit.
That is
 why
tourists
 should maintain civil behaviour when they are planning to travel so that they can not disturb the community. In conclusion, the government of a
nation
 can benefit from a lot of things from the increasing
number
 of
tourists
 that helps them improve the well-being of the
nation
,
however
,there should be kept rules so that the ecosystem should not be affected by the increasing
number
 of
tourists
 that tend to be careless about how they can destroy a
place
 if they do not pay attention, especially to recycling.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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