When a country develops its technology the traditional skills and way of life die out. it is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

Traditional
skills
and matters are
disappering
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disappearing
because of our advanced
technology
invented every day in a nation. It makes no
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to still put efforts to save the old traditional ways. I totally disagree with it and will give my points below.
Firstly
preserving the
skills
you got from your ancestors is the biggest
inheritage
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inheritance
a
person
can get. By
keep
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the ways alive you keep your ancestors alive. It can be said that you do it out of respect and to save your own existence. In
the
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addition to it, in
this
fast moving
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world, it is now hard to differentiate between people.
Secondly
, you have to preserve the culture of your nation and the community.
This
is where you look different and unique. Saving culture is protecting your children from the
western
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culture.
For example
,
few
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years ago a
person
in China was watering his fields with
the
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really old methods,
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a
person
came and asked him to use
the
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new
technology
. The first
person
replied, it may be easy to use new
technology
but
this
is how many Lord teaches me to do it.
Thirdly
, the use and advancement of
technology
is making people weak day by day. The more you rely on some outer source to work for you or
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help you
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the more you get weak mentally
as well as
physically.
Last
but not least,
technology
is changing the Speed of life. it is more confusion and drama now than
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previous period.
Whereas
keeping the
skills
you learn from your future will help you physically and
also
put peace in your mind.
For instance
, 50 years ago people were more happy and charming than they are now.
To conclude
the gold we get from our ancestors Are these
skills
and way of life. we should not forget
this
in the search
of
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modern and fake money.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancement
  • Efficiency
  • Global connectivity
  • Cultural identity
  • Diversity
  • Innovation
  • Coexist
  • Sustainable
  • Eco-friendly
  • Energy-intensive
  • Practical skills
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Homogenize
  • Preservation
  • Global diversity
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