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Some people believe that it is the responsiblity of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others, however, believe that gorvernments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views, and give your opinion.

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It is often argued by a group of
people
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 that
individuals
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 are responsible for caring for their
health
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 and having a balanced
diet
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,
although
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 there are
also
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 other
people
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 who think that
governments
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 should monitor the
diet
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 of
society
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. From my point of view, I agree with
this
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 idea. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both sides in detail and will state my stance. On the
one
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 hand, there are a group of
people
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 who opine that
individuals
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 are responsible for their
health
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 and having a balanced
diet
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.
In other words
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, every person is the only
one
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 that knows about himself and nobody can find out what is the best
diet
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 for another person.
For instance
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, no
one
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 knows about someone's
favourite
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 foods, fruits, and being vegetarian or not. Not only are not other
people
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 aware of someone's
favourite
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diet
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 but
also
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 they don't know about the
favourite
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lifestyle
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 of others because some
people
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 are into sports and
as a result
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, they must have a different
diet
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 related to other
individuals
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.
As a result
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, we are the only ones that can take care of our
health
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 since no
one
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 knows about our
lifestyle
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,
favourite
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 food and stuff like that.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 are of the opinion that
governments
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 are responsible for the
health
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 and
diet
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 of
society
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. To express differently, since most
individuals
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 pay taxes to governors and
governments
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,
therefore
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 they are responsible for
people
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 in
society
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 and must monitor their
health
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.
For instance
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,
governments
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 should execute some special programs like annual blood tests, cancer
test
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 and some
diet
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 programs for
people
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 in order to make sure about their healthy
lifestyle
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.
Moreover
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,
governments
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 should provide some useful TV programs to increase the knowledge of
people
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.
Consequently
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, it is the duty of
governments
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 to take care of the
health
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 and
diet
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 of
people
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 in
society
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.
To conclude
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,
although
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governments
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 control
society
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, I personally believe that it is the duty of
people
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 to take care of themselves as well as their
health
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 and
diet
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 by choosing a healthy
lifestyle
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 since
people
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 have complete information about their
lifestyle
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 and
favourite
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diet
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therefore
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, they can make the best decisions and choices about their
health
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 and
diet
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.
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