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The graph below shows CO2 emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union. The Pie Chart shows the percentage of European Union funds being spent on different forms of transport.

The graph below shows CO2 emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union. The Pie Chart shows the percentage of European Union funds being spent on different forms of transport.
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The given graph shows the carbon dioxide emissions for 6 different
forms
transportation
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of transportation
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 in the
European
Union
. What about the pie chart
shown
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showing
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 the rates of
European
Union
 funds that are being spent on different
forms
 of transportation
.
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   As can be seen in the bar graph
that
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Air is the highest rate in
European
Union
 it rose from 0 up
nearly
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to nearly
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 380 grams of co2 emission per
passenger
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per kilometer
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kilometer
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kilometre
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, mostly carbon dioxide comes from diesel cars.
Passenger
 cars
shows
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show
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 around 120 gram
of
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apply
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per
passenger
 KM,
furthermore
, buses are lower than
passenger
 cars it's approximately 70 per
passenger
 emissions. The
others
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other
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forms
 of transportation in
European
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the European
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Union
, are coach, maritime, and rail all of these
forms
 less than 50 grams of co2 per
passenger
 emissions.   
In the
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The
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 pie chart shows the three huge percentage
forms
 that are roads 52%, railways 31%, and public transport 10% of
European
union
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Union
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 funds being spent
on
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apply
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. The 7% remaining
divided
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is divided
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 by 5
section
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sections
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 which are intermodal, inland
waterway
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waterways
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, airports, ports 2%, and unknown 2%.       
Overall
, the air is the most present of transport in
European
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the European
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Union
.
However
, roads are the most funds being spent on different
forms
 of transport.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words forms, european, union, passenger with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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