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Some people think that public transport should be funded by the government so that it can be free to people who use it. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In our concurrent society, some assert that the local authorities ought to
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subsidize
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public transportation as a free service for residents. From my perspective, I partially advocate
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 notion, and my grounds will be critically elaborated
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 the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand,
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 phenomenon can dramatically alleviate a profusion of persistent issues, including traffic congestion and air pollution.
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, by encouraging inhabitants to use public transport without expenditure, people are more likely to cut down on the use of personal vehicles,
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 reducing the released emissions, which have detrimental impacts on our atmosphere.
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, the fewer
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 on the road, the fewer obstructions and traffic collisions happen in rush hour,
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 the fee for construction and maintenance of roads would be diminished.
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, Japanese people used to travel by electrical subway,
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 the annual proportion of accidents has remained a tiny.number.
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, what is half full for some may appear half empty to others.
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 public travel services, there are other fields that need the financial allocation of the authorities to wholly enhance the residents’ living standards. It is undeniable that the academic systems and medical services, to name but two, are currently meeting a myriad of obstacles which can be overcome with economic support.
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, in retrospect, when COVID spread out with unprecedented speed, the deficiency of investment
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 indisputable health prevention, especially in developing nations, resulted in the mortality and fatality of numerous beggars. As an implication, were governments
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 adequate money for public transportation, they would curb the budget allocation for others and lead to an imbalanced society. To encapsulate, authorities’ expenditure
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 public transport brings both merits and demerits for the community. From my point of view,
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 projection will be strengthened by the supportive attitude of the general population.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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