Students leave high school without learning how to manage their money. What are the reasons and solutions for this issue?

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It is true that teenagers graduate from high school without knowing how to handle their finances. I will discuss

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opinion

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/SOLUTIONS for that problem. One main cause of

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issue IS that nowadays, high

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think education which will support

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finding jobs.

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investing

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will help to have a better career path. Because high school show that they are not

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enough to understand and they still should depend on their family. Their family should take care and control their

money

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to spend more

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for any bad case. High

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believe that students needn'

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study

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financial management because they can'

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earn a lot of

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they are learning, they should pay

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their life and

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they can gain more

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things. When they reach the right age, they will have comfortable

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, understand

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importance of

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issue and study

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management more easily.

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high

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should have a lot of solutions for that issue. High

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should open many

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for managing finance. Because they can early aware of the importance of

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, they can use it more carefully. they will help their family

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uncomfortable when they

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necessary skills for their life when they have to

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from their parents

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some occasions. Families should give a little

money

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and teach them how to use it

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help their children needn'

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rely on their parents. If they don'

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know how to manage, they can be affected by a lot of bad elements and very easily lost

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them. In conclusion, High school should have

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in teaching them about financial management, equipment is indispensable because it is very important that can serve them in many cases in their life

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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Students leave high school without learning how to manage their money. What are the reasons and solutions for this issue?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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