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Some people feel that with rise of artificial intelligence, computers and robots will take over the roles of teachers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

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There is an ever-increasing use of modern
technologies
such
 as tablets and androids in schools and universities as a part of teachers’ jobs. With regards to being replaced a teacher’s position with man-made intelligence, some believe that it is a positive improvement,
while
 others disagree and think leads to adverse ramifications.
It is clear that
 tablets and laptops have provided students access to more information than ever before and
also
 other educational
technologies
 have already been set up with the required knowledge of teachers to answer students’ questions correctly.
Furthermore
, human-made intelligence has far more precise and accurate knowledge than a single teacher’s specialisation. It seems very likely,
therefore
 tablets and androids fulfil their potential in educational industries and have the ability to lead classes independently. Another advantage of having intellectual robots in education is to reduce the load of teachers’ responsibilities and pressures as replacing their jobs.
For instance
, robots can check students’ assignments, create exams and even play with people in some ways. Those simple educational interactions with students are more adaptable to a learning environment. Having said that
technologies
 would deprive people of real human interaction. The genuine relationships between educators and pupils teach valuable soft skills,
such
 as effective lectures, practical discussions and precious empathy experiences. That beneficial human-to-human contact is significant and influences their future professional life. Communication with robots never meets those effective worthwhile education. In conclusion, even though I feel that educational institutions should exploit the most innovative
technologies
 to perform teachers’ roles in the future, the
technologies
 should be used as tools to assist teachers, not to replace them. In
this
 way, students would receive the benefits of both ways of instruction.
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