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The diagram illustrates information on transport and car use in Edmonton.

The diagram illustrates information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
The diagram illustrates information on transport and
car
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 use in Edmonton.
Overall
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, just under
the
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apply
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half(45%) in the pie
chart
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 takes
car
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 transport in comparison to other vehicles. In the
table
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,table
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 about 55 per cent usage of
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the car
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car
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cars
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 is
commute
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the commute
a commute
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 to work and for the business principle.
To begin
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 with
pie
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the pie
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chart
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 is divided
by
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into
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 4 slices, there is
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car
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a car
the car
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, LRT, bus and the
last
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 one is a taxi. If we consider
car
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 usage, it is about forty-five per cent,
high
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a high
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 rate among others
also
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 taking up about half of
pie
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the pie
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chart
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.
Although
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, LRT
a
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is a
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little behind on
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car
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the car
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, occupying about
one third
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 of
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chart
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the chart
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. Bus with taxi has similar figures a modest ten per cent. The next is
table
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a table
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people's
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of people's
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reason
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reasons
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 for using
the
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a
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car
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 in
city
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the city
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, in that
case
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,case
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 people using
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car
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the car
a car
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for
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to
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commute
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the commute
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 to work,
making
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make
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 up about 55
percent
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per cent
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 of the entire table.
Besides
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, the use of
the
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apply
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transport observed for business nearly half(45%).

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, chart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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