In modern times, children are spending less time with their families and more time with their friends. Why has this change occurred? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?
Nowadays,
children
spend more time
with their friends
than with their families. This
change has occurred because offspring do not want to feel left out amongst their peers and parents
should not force children
to stay home
because they will resent their parents
for it.
Young ones do not want to miss out on social exercise with their friends
. Since the invention of technology, many activities
that people carry out, especially teenagers, are now being posted online. As a result
, children
want to engage more in activities
with their peers so they would also
have fun stories to post on their social media pages and not be the odd ones among their peers. For example
, many young people in South Korea are known to shop and visit fun places with their friends
rather than their parents
, so as to show off the fun activities
they engage in on WeChat, a popular social media platform.
Children
whose parents
mandate spending more time
at home
might hold a grudge towards their parents
. This
is because if children
are forced by their parents
to spend more time
at home
, they may interpret this
as a form of punishment and develop a negative attitude towards their parents
, which defeats the goal of family time
. However
, if they are encouraged to play with their siblings and bond with the family, children
will be more willing to stay at home
. For example
, most children
in Nigeria, even though they spend time
with their friends
, look forward to family time
because parents
in Nigeria emphasize the benefits of spending more time
with family.
In conclusion, children
want to engage in activities
with their friends
and not be left out, and parents
should encourage their children
to stay at home
more, rather than force them so that their children
will not resent them.Submitted by nidaa_hamed on
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