Many companies sponsor sports as a way of advertising themselves. Some people think this is good for the world of sport, while others think it is negative. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People

have different views regarding, the companies

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providing sponsorships to some

sport

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events or teams. Some argue that

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it is a

way

to advertise the

company

in a unique

way

and it is betterment for that particular

sport

While

, others argue that, it can affect

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in a negative

way

. In

this

essay, I shall discuss both views and give my opinion. Nowadays, we can see that, many companies are sponsoring the events or sponsoring the

team

of a particular

sport

. It is beneficial for both

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parties

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because it can promote the

company

and the

team

or the

sport

gets financial aid. And

due to

that, more

people

get interested in

the

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sports. Eventually, it gets famous and more opportunities open in the world of

sport

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, we can see on

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the cricket

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, there are many hoardings of companies available near the stadium or logos on the

sponsered

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5Word repetition
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4 paragraphs

307 words

6.00

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:

sponsorship
advertisement
financial support
visibility
popularity
athletes
excel
healthy competition
commercialization
fair competition
profits
well-being
exclusion
less popular sports

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