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In many countries nowadays, young single people no longer stay with their parents until they are married, but leave to study or work somewhere else. Do you think this trend has more advantages or disadvantages?

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It is a fact that a lot of young
people
 leave their
parents
' house when they complete their graduation from high
schools
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school
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. They prefer to live independently as they continue their higher education or decide to work.
This
 trend has its' own positive and negative side, but I personally believe that it has more benefits than
the
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drawback. On the one hand, many
people
 believe that leaving
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their parents
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parents
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parents'
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 house
during
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at
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the
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 young
age
 has a disadvantage. It is undeniable that many young teenagers are not yet ready to live independently by themselves. Many of these
people
 are not yet
matured
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 in making decisions and in differentiating between right or wrong for them.
As a consequence
, many
of
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the
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young
people
 become addicted to narcotics and alcohol or became pregnant at a very young
age
.
On the other hand
, despite the disadvantage, living independently at
the
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 young
age
 has some advantages for them.
Firstly
, they will learn how to manage their own life and appreciate the time. They learn how to set some priorities in their life, as they have to make schedules for studying,
groceries
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 shopping, doing the laundry or cleaning their apartment by themselves.
Secondly
, for those who leave their
parents
 for work, they would reduce the burden
of
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 their
parents
.
Parents
 could stop the financial
supports
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 for their child and could be allocated for the younger children or for their retirement plan. In conclusion, it is true that many young
age
people
 choose to live independently these days after they have graduated from high school.
Although
 the trend has a drawback,
but
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I personally believe that it has more advantages for both the child and the
parents
 as well.
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