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You recently spent a weekend with your friend in her/his new house. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: • explain what you like about his new house • describe what you enjoyed most about your stay • suggest when and where you could meet next

#weekend #friend #house
Dear Jones I hope
this
 letter finds you well brother,
firstly
 I'd like to thank you for the pleasant time we had
last
 weekend, there are lots of things I loved about your new home, I'd like to mention them here to grab your attention to them.
To begin
 with, the most attractive place in the new home is the outside garden, it is really charming with colourful flowers, and the view from your window is really amazing.
In addition
, the new roof is larger than the old one,
therefore
 we can use it to make barbeque parties whenever we like.
Moreover
, I'd like you to know that the most things I liked about my stay are our night discussion, we spent these hours in real conversation about our plans for
future
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, and our memories together.
Furthermore
, I really liked the pets you raise in your backyard, they are friendly and lovely.
Finally
, I'd like to suggest our next
meet
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 to be here in my home, my family will be back from their short vacation so we could meet and have our dinner together, you won't regret
about
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it brother, try to take
this
 day off and come over. I'm waiting for your kind reply. Yours sincerely, Adam.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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