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In large towns and cities, people often know very few of their neighbors. What problems can this cause? What can be done about these problems?

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In the past,
people
 often knew their
neighbors
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 and they help each other when they need help.
However
, nowadays,
people
 who live in large towns and
cities
 usually do not know a lot about their
neighbors
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. The main reasons could be that
people
 frequently
move
 their houses and the high population in a
city
. One of the main reasons is that residents often change their places.
For example
, most
people
 who are working usually live in towns where their companies are.
Therefore
, if they quit
works
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 and get new
works
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, they will
move
 residences because of jobs. As
people
 change houses easily, they can not be close to
neighbors
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.
People
 can solve these problems by greeting and introducing themselves to
neighbors
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 when they
move
 in. If they introduce themselves when they
move
 in,
neighbors
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 can know about them and they could be close easily. Another reason is because of the high population of the
city
. The reason is that a
city
 is economically active
cities
.
People
 who live in economically active
cities
 can get their jobs easily.
Therefore
,
people
 want to live there.
People
 who are living in active metropolises will be busy because of their jobs. They don’t have enough time on weekdays, they usually meet their friends or take a rest in their places on weekends. If metropolises make the local
city
 or town festivals,
people
 can meet their
neighbors
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 easily and they can enjoy the festival together. Communities can enjoy their weekend with
neighbors
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 at the festival. In conclusion,
although
 modern
people
 do not have the time to spend with their
neighbors
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, it will help them if they are close to the communities next door. The government should find ways to make active
cities
.
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