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In recent years, the family structure and the role of its members are gradually changing. What kinds of changes can occur? Do you think these changes are positive and negative?

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In the present society, there are many different types of
families
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. Some
families
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 have general infrastructure.
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, many
families
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 have changed from the past. In the following paragraphs,both views on
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 topic will be discussed in detail.
this
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 essay talks about family in the past. Infrastructure of family, the head of the family is a father who is responsible for taking care of family members.
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, he has to work to earn money for family expenses
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 as diet, travel and children's educational expenses.
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, there is a mother who takes care of everything in the house
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 as cooking, cleaning the house and so on, but they all had to do their best. Some
families
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 live together independently because of the decision of the father or mother. Not only do their own duties but
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 have a common orderly living.
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family in present society.
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 many
family
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 coexist with democracy everyone can express
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 own opinion. Some family has the head of the family
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the mother. Everyone helps each other in every way or everything. That's good.
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 article will demonstrate the good relations among family members.
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 in my opinion i think We can depend on each other regardless of who's duty and that will bring us closer together. In
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 will talk about the differences
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 both views. The two opinions have positive and negative, It depends on each person's family structure. The advantage
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 the first article is that they will have an organized family layout. In the second
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 there is an advantage that they can be interdependent.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual-income
  • gender roles
  • single-parent households
  • divorce rates
  • same-sex parents
  • multigenerational
  • family dynamics
  • aging population
  • communication technology
  • child-rearing approaches
  • work-life balance
  • remote working
  • family structure
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