More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people suggest that the solution to this problem is to increase the price of fattening foods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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ideal solution. Let's try to look at
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situation from different perspectives. Some people assert that the
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of fast food prices could be a resolution,
whereas
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plan has a huge
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disadvantage
. I believe
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that the main problem of
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is
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financial problems,
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people can not afford
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fresh healthy food, so they have to take
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cheaper one
instead
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Furthermore
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the price would rather get worse, because men would start
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feeding
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even worse and their life would become harder.
Moreover
,
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suggestion could cause
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mental problems
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to
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physical ones. I assume that
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society should pay attention to the
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of life level, namely try to make healthy products
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all classes.
in addition
to mentioned before, there is
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evidence against assuming suggestion. There is a widely known
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effect, which
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, the more desired.
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to do, the
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want to do
this
thing.
That is
to say, making conditions worse would not help the situation. In conclusion, I would disagree with the statement
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the topic. I think we should improve the
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economic
situation to make good products cheaper
instead
of
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or
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up the fat food consumption.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • fattening foods
  • calorie-dense
  • healthier food choices
  • taxation
  • economic implications
  • social implications
  • subsidies
  • nutritional education
  • public health campaigns
  • nanny state
  • individual's right
  • consumer behavior
  • preventative measures
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