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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britian. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distribiuted.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britian. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distribiuted.
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The two pie charts and table illustrate the data on the whole
budget
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 of the police department and the distribution of expenditure in a certain area of Britain in 2017 and 2018.
Overall
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, the biggest part of the police
budget
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 and the majority part of the different categories on which money was spent did not change, still being the national governments and salaries respectively.
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, these two data show a slight increase respectively. As can be seen, the contribution of the national government accounted for more than half of the total
budget
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, which stood at 175.5
million
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 in 2017 and 177.8
million
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 in 2018. It was followed by 91.2
million
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 in local taxes and 38.5
million
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 in other resources
such
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 as grants in 2017. The local tax revenue had increased by approximately 10
million
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, whilst the number of other resources
such
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 as grants stabilized at about 38
million
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. When it comes to how the money was spent, the proportion of buildings and transport remained unchanged from 2017 to 2018 and remained at 17
percent
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per cent
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.
However
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, the
budget
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 allocated for technology increased from 8% to 14% in 2018. Despite the salaries of officers and staff
had
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having
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 decreased by 6
percent
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per cent
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,
it
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they
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 still occupied the largest part in 2018.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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