A friend wants find a part time job to earn some money while studying. You have heard about a suitable job for your friend. Write a letter to this friend,in your letter, - describe the job - Explain why you think it is suitable for your friend. - Say what your friend should do to get this job.

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Dear Ngoc, I am writing

this

letter to tell you about a part-time

job

that I have heard that can be suitable for you to earn some money

while

studying. I hope

this

letter finds you well.

The

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part-time

job

is being a waiter at my father's

coffee

shop. You only need to take 4 hours a day and you can choose to do

this

job

in the morning or afternoon. A waiter must speak English and work well with the boss. It is a good

job

for you. I think

this

job

is suitable for you because it helps you to earn money

while

studying. You

also

can learn more about

coffee

. You will have a chance to speak English with everyone. What you should do is have a CV and some knowledge about

coffee

. You need to have good health before you go to work in a

coffee

shop. Hoping to hear from you soon Love, Thuy

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Structure

Vary sentence structures to enhance flow and reader engagement.

Content

For a higher score, consider adding more detail about the job responsibilities and how these specifically suit your friend's abilities or interests. Adding personal anecdotes or more specific reasoning can strengthen your argument.

Flow

Usage of connecting words and transition phrases can further improve the cohesion between your ideas, making the letter flow even more smoothly.

Task response

You effectively addressed all three bullet points, making your letter complete in terms of task response.

Tone

You maintained a friendly and appropriate tone throughout the letter, which fits the context of writing to a friend.

Structure

You structured your letter well, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs addressing the bullet points, and a friendly closing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

159 words

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