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A university education is the key to getting a good job. For that reason, the government should provide enough money to the universities so everyone can get a degree for free. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, a
university
degree
 is undoubtedly crucial for attaining good career opportunities. Some people argue that
university
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 should be free and accessible to everyone. I strongly agree with
this
 point of view because
government
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 should take
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responsibility to provide a free and affordable
university
 so that citizens could get
same
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 chances in the job market.
Firstly
,
university
 education is not the only sector that should be invested. Running a country is similar to managing a company.
Government
 should balance
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cash flow properly. In
this
 case, the
government
 should
also
 put their funding to other beneficial areas
in particular
 infrastructure, health services, and transportation facilities.
Furthermore
, not every student urgently needs
free
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 cost of
university
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degree
. Some of them possibly are born from a rich family who can afford the cost.
However
, it is evident that the
university
 fee is increasing every year.
Therefore
, it could prohibit the unlucky student who
do
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 not in good economic status to achieve a
university
degree
. The
government
 should address
this
 problem. I firmly believe that human resource is the key factor in
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 development. The more people obtain a
university
degree
, the better quality of Individuals in society.
Consequently
,
Government
 should invest considerably
to
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 the
university
.
For instance
, Indonesia is a developing country where the majority of
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 come from poor economic status. Unfortunately, we cannot find a free
university
 or at least
affordable
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 high-quality college in Indonesia.
This
 is one of the reasons why Indonesia still struggles to upgrade to a high-developed country. In conclusion, I fully support
government
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 should prioritize the funding of
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university
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. Even though they cannot make it entirely free, reducing the fees without compromising the quality of education would be a positive step.
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