some people think that schools are no longer necessary because people can aquire information on the internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The
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has been one of the most important inventions of
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, which brought significant changes to urban societies and it is becoming more and more popular, as far as
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many gravitate toward
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this
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point that the
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is a proper replacement
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schools
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,
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, I refute
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view because of sundry reasons which will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. Since
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children are passing through a crucial phase of their life, their social skills must be monitored to a large extent. In order to overcome challenges, not only do they improve their knowledge, but their communication skills must be enhanced.
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, by attending
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schools
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they gain a chance of keeping in touch with their peers and learn how to establish a successful relationship,
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, addressing some problems alone is roughly insurmountable, which requires
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work
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as a group so as to solve them,
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, in cut-throat competition era that companies are involved in, at no time do they outpace the rivals if they do not have teams to
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in a harmonic way, so, as
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future
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, children must be guided on how to
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as part of a group.
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, some people support the view of using online sources
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of going to
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schools
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. To support
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viewpoint, they argue that acquiring data from the
internet
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is much less
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and does not need to allocate weighty funds,
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it seems that devastating results of immersing on the
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such
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as becoming
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person and unpleasant behaviours are overlooked by them. I,
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, admire
schools
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because they shed light on the path to a better for our loved ones and reform their improper ideas and behaviours. In conclusion, despite the fact that the
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is more reasonable in terms of time and budget, the pros of group
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, social skills and having constructive ideas and
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far outweigh online learning. so, in my opinion,
schools
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are tremendously crucial, and it is suggested that more efficient methods of learning should be introduced by using
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internet
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at
schools
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.
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