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The maps below show changed in the city of Nelson in recent times. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make a comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show changed in the city of Nelson in recent times. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make a comparisons where relevant.
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The changes that have taken place in
Nelson
city
 from the year 2000 until today have been shown in the given maps.
Overall
,
Nelson
city
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City
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 has expanded its net area and has significantly developed since 2000. Starting off from the western
side
 of
Nelson
city
, a
6 storey
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6-storey
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resedential
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residential
 tower has been constructed. The train station has been relocated to a new
trainstation
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train station
 with a tram track.
Moreover
, the old market has been converted into a new shop and a sea
faing
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facing
faring
restraunt
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restaurant
 has been introduced across the road. Speaking of the central development in
Nelson
city
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City
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, we can see that the university has been untouched but
bike
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a bike
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 rental scheme has been introduced in the
city
 centre. It can
also
 be seen that the
motor way
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motorway
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 has been converted to a pedestrian promenade and looks like
nelson
city
 has taken more sustainable approaches by cutting vehicular movement and reducing pollution. On the
north eastern
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northeastern
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side
 of
Neslon
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Nelson
city
 today, we can find the new shopping centre which is in line with the university.
Also
, the new market has shifted from the west to the eastern
side
 of the
city
 centre. Bars and pubs have been introduced on the
south eastern
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southeastern
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side
 of
Nelson
city
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City
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 from 2000 till today. To
sumup
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sum up
, significant
devlopments
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developments
along with
sustainable
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a sustainable
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approached
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approach
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 have been made from 2000 till date.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nelson, city, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • modifications
  • upgrades
  • facilities
  • commercial areas
  • residential zones
  • green spaces
  • recreational facilities
  • industrial areas
  • environmental conservation
  • eco-friendly
  • pollution control
  • distinct difference
  • notable change
  • expansion
  • decline
  • transformation
  • enhancement
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