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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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it is thought by a considerable number of people that
students
 ought to study how to prepare and cultivate
food
. I could not agree more with
this
 view for two specific reasons: many
students
 who live in urban areas do not know about how
food
 grows, and if they learn to prepare a meal, their self-confidence is to increase.
To begin
 with, many people do not agree with
this
 view because the period of school plays a crucial role in their development,
for
this
 reason, in school the
students
 should only focus on the most important subjects
such
 as sciences, maths, or other lectures.
Thus
, they can gain a lot of knowledge, and reach a good career.
Secondly
, schools are where not only sciences learning but
also
 ready for
life
.
Therefore
, especially, living
students
 in urban areas are not aware of how
food
 grows, and their knowledge
limit
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 to books.
As a consequence
 of
this
 shortcoming, they do not realize to what extent the importance of the environment
.
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At the end
 of the day, they beget some social problems
such
 as pollution, deforestation or over waste inasmuch as they do not understand the unique role of the environment to live.
Thirdly
, if children prepare meals to eat, they gain experience in
life
. As
this
 experience increases, they feel more confident in
life
. How they look at
life
 is more important to their
life
 and career. That’s why
students
 should learn somewhat knowledge in relation to
food
.
To conclude
, they should learn how
food
 grows and prepare because these reasons overwhelm other views.
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