The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.

The line chart illustrates how many people participated in 4 different types of sports in a particular area over a twenty-year period, from 1985 to 2005.

Overall

rugby

was the most popular sport in the first ten years

while

tennis

took the lead in the second half of the period.

In addition

, the number of its players witnessed a downward trend;

on the other hand

tennis

took the opposite direction.

Moreover

, for basketball and

badminton

, the trends were relatively stable. In 1985, the number of people playing

rugby

started at just under 250, surpassing the figure for

tennis

players by about 100. The participation rates for basketball and

badminton

were comparatively lower, which were nearly 80 and 50 participants respectively.

Subsequently

, the number of

rugby

players plummeted and hit a low of 50 in 2005, equal to the figure for

badminton

in the same year.

On the contrary

, the trend for

tennis

was upward, with its participation rates increasing to roughly 220 people

at the end

of the period, overtaking

rugby

to be the most popular sport in the region.

Finally

, the figures for basketball and

badminton

remained unchanged, hovering around 80 and 50 participants in turn.

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