The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.

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The line chart illustrates how many people participated in 4 different types of sports in a particular area over a twenty-year period, from 1985 to 2005.

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rugby

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was the most popular sport in the first ten years

while

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tennis

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took the lead in the second half of the period.

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, the number of its players witnessed a downward trend;

on the other hand

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tennis

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took the opposite direction.

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, for basketball and

badminton

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, the trends were relatively stable. In 1985, the number of people playing

rugby

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started at just under 250, surpassing the figure for

tennis

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players by about 100. The participation rates for basketball and

badminton

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were comparatively lower, which were nearly 80 and 50 participants respectively.

Subsequently

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, the number of

rugby

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players plummeted and hit a low of 50 in 2005, equal to the figure for

badminton

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in the same year.

On the contrary

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, the trend for

tennis

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was upward, with its participation rates increasing to roughly 220 people

at the end

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of the period, overtaking

rugby

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to be the most popular sport in the region.

Finally

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, the figures for basketball and

badminton

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remained unchanged, hovering around 80 and 50 participants in turn.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Replace the words rugby, tennis, badminton with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

197 words

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The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.

Describe how you manage your time when you are both planning and coordinating activities in your personal schedule.

Many elderly people are no longer looked after by their families but are put in care homes or nursing homes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend and what is your opinion?

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

some people say that that adversiting is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things.other people think that advertining is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinoin

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?