The mass media including TV, radio and newspaper have a great influence on people’s ideas today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People tend to receive information about news, lifestyles, or entertainment by various means of communication
such
as
television
, radio, and
newspaper
.
Along with
technology developments, individuals are shifting to other tools like social
media
or online
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as the source of knowledge.
However
, I greatly agree with
second
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opinion.
Firstly
, there are various types of
television
programs that are
showed
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to audiences.
Television
broadcasters produce many kinds of
genre
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genres
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to grab diverse viewers.
For instance
, sport is one of the spectacles that has many crowds. English Premier
league
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, the
world
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most outstanding football competition, is
being
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the target of many TV
Channel
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channels
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to become official broadcast
partner
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partners
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because they have large fanatic fans.
While
it is often said that the number of
television
audiences continuously
decline
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,
television
will remain the primary medium
due to
its extensive coverage for the next several years.
On the other hand
, people nowadays prefer to get
the
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new information with their own
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especially
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from social
media
(TikTok, Instagram reels, and YouTube short) and online news
platform
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platforms
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.
This
trend is
happened
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happening
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because of the increasing
of
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the
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internet penetration number so that
individual
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individuals
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can access
the
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information
by
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anytime and anywhere as far as they have devices. My father used to cannot read
newspaper
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the newspaper
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if the officer did not deliver it to my home.
However
,
Newspaper
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company has transformed regardless
the
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change
of
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customer behaviours.
For example
, Tempo, the leading
newspaper
producer for several years in Indonesia, has announced to discontinue
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their
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its
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printed paper edition and move to
online
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bulletin.
While
it is true that
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boomer’s
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generation sometimes
get
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difficulties
to
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following
this
trend, the
millennial
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millennials
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and Gen Z will persuade older people to use it. In conclusion, TV, radio, and
newspaper
still have their own customer even though their positions gradually are dethroned by internet-based means. I believe that today's society will choose the
media
that is
the easiest to reach and start leaving traditional mass
media
.
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