The mass media including TV, radio and newspaper have a great influence on people’s ideas today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People tend to receive information about news, lifestyles, or entertainment by various means of communication

such

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television

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, radio, and

newspaper

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Along with

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technology developments, individuals are shifting to other tools like social

media

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or online

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as the source of knowledge.

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, I greatly agree with

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opinion.

Firstly

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, there are various types of

television

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programs that are

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to audiences.

Television

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broadcasters produce many kinds of

genre

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genres

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to grab diverse viewers.

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, sport is one of the spectacles that has many crowds. English Premier

league

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, the

world

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world's

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most outstanding football competition, is

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the target of many TV

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channels

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to become official broadcast

partner

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partners

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because they have large fanatic fans.

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it is often said that the number of

television

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audiences continuously

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declines

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television

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will remain the primary medium

due to

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its extensive coverage for the next several years.

On the other hand

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, people nowadays prefer to get

the

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new information with their own

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especially

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from social

media

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(TikTok, Instagram reels, and YouTube short) and online news

platform

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platforms

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This

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trend is

happened

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happening

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because of the increasing

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the

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apply

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internet penetration number so that

individual

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individuals

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can access

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information

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apply

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anytime and anywhere as far as they have devices. My father used to cannot read

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newspaper

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the newspaper

a newspaper

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if the officer did not deliver it to my home.

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Newspaper

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the Newspaper

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company has transformed regardless

the

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of the

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change

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customer behaviours.

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, Tempo, the leading

newspaper

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producer for several years in Indonesia, has announced to discontinue

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of their

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their

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printed paper edition and move to

online

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an online

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bulletin.

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it is true that

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the boomer’s

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boomer’s

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boomer

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generation sometimes

get

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difficulties

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apply

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following

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this

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trend, the

millennial

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and Gen Z will persuade older people to use it. In conclusion, TV, radio, and

newspaper

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still have their own customer even though their positions gradually are dethroned by internet-based means. I believe that today's society will choose the

media

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that is

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the easiest to reach and start leaving traditional mass

media

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

323 words

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The mass media including TV, radio and newspaper have a great influence on people’s ideas today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that money spent on space research benefits all humanity. Others take the opposite view and say that money for this type of research is wasted. Discuss these 2 opinions / positions.

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You have recently moved to a new place and haven’t got a chance to tell your friend. Write a letter to your friend, Where and why you move from there Compare your new place to old Where do u live now