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A university education is the key to getting a good job. For that reason, the government should provide enough money to the universities so everyone can get a degree for free. To what extent do you agree?

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In today’s world, good jobs are only open to
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 graduates.
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, many people would like universities to be free of charge.
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, my own view is that
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 should make some contribution towards the cost of their
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University
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education
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 is expensive and, for many people, unaffordable. In fact, tuition fees continue to rise, perhaps because recent advances in technology are forcing universities to invest in more equipment. Many very bright
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 are unable to pay tuition fees; it would be unfair if they could not get a degree. It is
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 in our country’s economic interest to have a highly qualified workforce so that we can compete in a globalized world. Germany,
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, offers
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free
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 at most public universities not just to Germans, but
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 to foreigners who wish to study there
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, there are many families who can afford to send their children to
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.
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 can
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 earn money during their holidays; young people need to learn that nothing in life is free. My parents had to work hard to afford
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, and they accepted
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 as a fact of life. The government has a limited budget, and it doesn’t make sense to subsidize the
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 of rich
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 when money is desperately needed for
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health service, transport infrastructure and so on. In conclusion, there are good arguments to be made for and against free
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education
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. Learning is a very important process, but not the sole priority for our government. On balance, I believe that
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 and their families should pay as much of the tuition as they can, and government should pay the remainder.
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