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Some people believe governments should spend money in saving languages of few speakers from dying out completely. Others think this is a waste of financial resources. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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When it comes to
languages
, English has become the most spoken
language
 in the world,
while
 some minority
languages
 are dying since the
languages
 are spoken by fewer
people
.
Although
 there are debates about government should provide financial support to save the
languages
 that are endangered or not, from my perspective, these
languages
 should be saved and recorded in order to conserve
languages
 and the
culture
 related to them which are nearly extinct. Indeed, saving
languages
 that are spoken by a minority of
people
 could cost a lot of funding since it has to organise a vast number of researchers to collect and record these
languages
 through interviews with the
language
 speakers.
Also
,
people
 may find these
languages
 less practical compared to those dominant
languages
 and has limited usage in modern society.
Therefore
, some claim that it is not worth saving these
languages
 since it requires investment from the government to save
languages
 that have less utility.
On the other hand
, by saving these endangered
languages
, researchers can have insights into linguistics and history, which enable them to understand the cultures and local customs of the
language
 speakers.
Also
, these discoveries may enrich the diversity of human
culture
 and help
people
 to find out their identities and the origin of their nation.
In addition
, by investing in preserving
languages
 with few speakers, the government can maintain the diversity of linguistics and have more connection to the
culture
 of the endangered
languages
. In conclusion,
although
 it may take a long period of time and a large amount of money to save these
languages
, it is priceless for the
culture
 and
language
 itself to be conserved.
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