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The pie chart below demonstrate top ten processed food delivery market in USA for last seven years ago.

The chart below
demonstrate
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top
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the top
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 ten processed
food
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 delivery market in
USA
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the USA
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 for
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last
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the last
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 seven
years
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 ago.
Overall
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, those who
exporting
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exported
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food
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 in Canada and
Rest
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the Rest
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 of the world were comparatively higher in number,
whereas
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 Hong Kong was the lowest. In
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last
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the last
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six
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and
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apply
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year
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years
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 ago, just above
one
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apply
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twelve and
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apply
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one
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,one
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 eight of
total
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the total
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 number
money
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 was spent in Canada.
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Moreover
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,Moreover
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 Rest of the world seven
years
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 ago wasted for process more than
six
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 and 10
billion
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 US
dollar
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dollars
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.
Nevertheless
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, Australia and Hong Kong similar
sum
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sums
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 of
money
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six
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years
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 ago, but
years
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 ago was less than
two
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billion
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dollar
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dollars
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.
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However
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 in
two
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countries
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 show some changes. Mexico and European Union rose by 1.8-2.1
billion
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dollar
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dollars
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 in
breeding
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the breeding
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 season, but
six
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years
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 ago in these
countries
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 were 2.6-4.0
billion
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,
whereas
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 those who processed
food
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 export markets in Japan reduced by 0.1-0.3 of
total
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the total
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 number,
six
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years
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 ago in
two
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countries
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 was 0.8-2.4
billion
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,
however
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 in South Korea and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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six
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years
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 ago declined drastically approximately 0.7
billion
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, but in
last
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year
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 increased to 1.2-1.6 US
money
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. Seven
years
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 ago, more passed and surprisingly.
Food
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 delivery Markets which
processed
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are processed
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 in Australia with Hong Kong remained the same sum in
last
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year
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.
However
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 in
Phillipines
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the Phillipines
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last
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year
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sum
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the sum
a sum
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 of
money
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up
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was up
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 to 0.5. Interestingly, a drastic rise
,
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apply
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 had
two
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countries
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 than other.

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