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Some people feel that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is more better in countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #city #life #countryside
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Selecting a place to live is completely an individual choice. It all depends on the person's preference
where
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one
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 wants to reside.
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why
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,
one
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 set of society believes that city
life
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 is comparatively far good than village
life
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.
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,
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 other
group
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groups
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 support the
later
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latter
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 idea. Both sides of
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 will be discussed
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 my perspective before a reasoned conclusion is drawn. To commence with
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a former
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 view of benefits of living in
city
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the city
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 centre. The prominent factor is cities are usually
well developed
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 in comparison
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 small areas. It offers more amenities to
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masses
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 as more
number of
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schools, colleges, hospitals and many more with easy accessibility to all of these by using public transport even
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if
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 does not possess own personal vehicle. To exemplify, cities developed infrastructural make people's
life
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 easy, where they do not have to cover long distances to
fulfill
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 their needs.
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, they could feel more privileged than
population
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the population
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 in unprivileged areas.
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, individuals in undeveloped places enjoy few other benefits by staying there. First of all, they generally find themselves
more close
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closer
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 to nature, when the green environment offers them extravagant relaxation and
tranquility
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tranquillity
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 away from the hustle
bustle
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and bustle
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 of crowded places.
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, they encounter more opportunities to socialise within
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society
instead
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 of waiting for some special occasions as city people.
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, a survey conducted by the Times of India indicated that
village
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the village
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 populace is more social
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 when it comes to celebrating festivals
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 as Christmas , Diwali, Holi and other special events.
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, more engagement in communal activities could bring more contentment
in
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 their
life
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, which may increase their
life
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 expectancy. In my opinion, settling in
countryside
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the countryside
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 is more advantageous.
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 is because
one
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 could lead a healthy
life
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 by connecting more to the natural environment . In
nutshell
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, residing in both regions has
their
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its
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 own pros which cannot be denied.
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, living in
outskirts
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the outskirts
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 brings supplementary gains.
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