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The map shows how coastal land develops into a coastal park.

The maps depict information about previous and future development of coastal
land
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 into
costal
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coastal
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park
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parks
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.
Overall
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,
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initially
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in
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on
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 coastal
land
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,
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they are
fam
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farm
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buildings
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,animals ,
agricultural
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and agricultural
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land
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while
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 after
construction
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the construction
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 of
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park
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the park
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 excessive number of trees, people and many
other
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others
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 are added.
In before
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Before
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 development of
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park
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the park
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 on
north
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the north
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 side road is connected towards south
fam
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farm
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buildings
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, outside the road towards
south
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the south
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 cliffs,
beach
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the beach
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 and
sea
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the sea
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 .
Besides
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 ,
buildings
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agricultural
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agriculture
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, animals and unused
land
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 .
However
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, in
future
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this
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land
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 will be changed into
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park
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the park
a park
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.
On the other hand
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 , after
completion
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the completion
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 of
coastal
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the coastal
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park
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 , fam
buildings
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 had been replaced
to
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with
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 car parking ,
opposite
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the opposite
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 cafe
is build
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is built
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 for humans to sit and relax ,
have
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and have
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 snacks , tea and coffee.
Moreover
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,
in
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on
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 agricultural
land
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 planted numerous trees ,
footpath
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the footpath
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 is built around woods. On the west side , unused
land
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 is utilised for
lake
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a lake
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 . There is
footpath
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a footpath
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 on both sides.
Inaddition
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In addition
, the steps are added
in
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to
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 the cliffs.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words land, park, buildings with synonyms.
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