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The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time.

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The maps illustrate what the layout of the ground floor inside a building looked like from 1958 to the present.
It is clear that
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 there are various striking transformations through 3 periods of time. It is not only the change in the purposes of using but
also
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 the arrangement of different rooms.
However
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, the entrance and kitchen remained the same. As can be seen, between 1958 and 1984, the place was used as an office with 6 rooms. On the left, there was a toilet, 2 offices for the assistant and secretary and a meeting space
at the end
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 of the corridor.
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, on the opposite side, a manager's office was installed between the cooking area and the reception area. Over the next period from 1985 to 2000, the area was repurposed into an apartment. Despite the unchanged position of the kitchen, a living room was built in the northwest and the toilet was turned into a bathroom with a shower. In the east of the house, there were 2 bedrooms constructed next to each other. During the period from 2000 to the present, the accommodation was rearranged as a flower shop. The old living room was shrunk to half in size and became the place for gift cards.
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, a playground appeared to replace the previous bathroom and an office was situated at the position of the old first bedroom.
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, flowers were placed on either side of the floor and the kitchen was still at its old spot.
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