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Educationalists think that international exchange visits are important for teenage school students. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent times, there have been debates about the usefulness of our heirs studying abroad as against them remaining in their fatherland to attain their education. Moreso, the idea of
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 discussion is to bring to our knowledge the usefulness of living in a foreign land.
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, how well it develops a child and the toll it takes on them being away from home for too long.
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, the basis upon which my whole discussion is built . Lately, the notion of studying abroad has been so rampant in our society that virtually every family send their offspring to other countries to advance their education.
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, studying overseas helps to expose a child to other cultures and ways of living of other people.
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, In America, parents are not allowed to beat their offspring.
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, in Africa , it is a common thing and no one will hold you responsible for it. To elucidate
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, educatee living in another country different from theirs, tend to have learnt how to manage their resources as regards funds.
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, in 2018 a survey was carried out in the University Of Connecticut which showed that 80% of international pupils managed their allowances well.
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, the result of
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 study, provided more grounds to justify the act of parents sending their heirs abroad.
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, the idealogy of sending kids to strange lands has done more harm than good in the life of some educatee. These children begin to feel homesick after a
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, thereby, losing concentration.
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, degenerates into the child having poor performance in his or her academics.
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, the result for mathematics at Cambridge University showed that poor performances of foreign students were a result of them feeling homesick. Upon
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, there is a total disagreement with parents funding their children's education abroad. Conclusively, the action taken by many adults in sending their wards to another country for their studies has greatly benefited them more than it has harmed them.
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, the exposure to other ways of living of other people ,
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 them learning how to manage their resources has greatly distinguished them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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