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It is believed that developed countries should solve the climate change, while others believe that it is developing countries that should dealth with this opinion. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

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Some people argue that improved nations should spend their investment and produce some ideas on climate
change
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, and others debate that developing nations should contribute to the environment which can
change
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 their
countries
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 and the world. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss the pros and cons of the given topic and give my opinion as follows.
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 with, developed nations are more responsible towards weather
change
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 as they produce more harmful emissions towards the sky in the industrial sector,
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 they spend millions and billions towards space to find evaluation but they hesitate to spend or commute with ideas towards mother nature where living beings are effecting towards rapid
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,
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 like America produce zero-emissions cars but they don't effectively invest in air filters to purify air quality or cannot control fumes for industries.
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, growing states want to compare themselves with developed
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 like America and forget about their climate
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 which significantly affects the crops and living species even if they support globally they are troubled with their own investments towards their own
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, Africa is much more affected by rainforests the country itself has issues to deal with so they can't even think about that
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 financial situations. In my opinion, high GDP
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 should have more concern towards the earth to exist life on earth naturally rather than underdeveloped
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 who are struggling for their own life,
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 the only planet where life exists everyone should be responsible and think about future generations.

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Ensure clarity in your arguments by structuring your essay more clearly into distinct paragraphs that each focus on a single main idea. This will help improve your logical flow.
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Try to enhance your introduction by clearly stating your own opinion right from the start. This helps guide the reader through your essay’s argument.
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Provide more specific examples that directly support your arguments. Concrete examples strengthen your points and make your argument more persuasive.
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You demonstrate an awareness of both sides of the argument, which is excellent for discussing contrasting views.
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Your essay presents relevant issues related to climate change, showing that you understand its importance.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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