In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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People
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have different views about buying a
house
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or renting
one
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, some
people
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may think that they feel
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to buy
one
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while
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others think that
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cheaper and less responsible to rent a home. In my opinion,
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a home is significant for our life. There are some relevant reasons for
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issue.
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we were
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by traditional values,
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very common in some countries. Taking China as an example, a large
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of
people
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would work hard for a
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because they
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by
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their parents’
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generation that owning a
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plays a vital role in our life,
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in
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responsibility, if a man is able to purchase value properties, he is easier to find a wife.
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advertisements of real estate advocate
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to buy a
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,
convenient
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and convenient
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facilities and locations are influenced
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people
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’s judgements.
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renting a
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is risky
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because
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the landlord wants to take it back, or they would charge your
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for unreasonable excuses.
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,
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the reasons I mention above, I still think owning a
house
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is very important for
people
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and we should put it in a positive situation. I truly understand that
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a hard mode
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time we start to pay housing
mortgage
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mortgages
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especially
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in big
city
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cities
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, there are two steps
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that can
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definitely be considered to tackle
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problem.
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one
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is that we need to make a plan that where we will settle down in the future,
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in urban
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, suburban or rural
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, some
people
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would work in
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a big
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city and save
money
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to purchase
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house
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a house
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in
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their hometown
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. When we retire, we still have a
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to settle down.
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owning is
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is necessary for a family, you can design
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ideal home
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while
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renting a
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always concern
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that
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deconstruction of
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appliances.
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there is no question that it will be stressful to have a
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,
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clear that you pay
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the landlord
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money
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to rent a
house
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rather than paying
money
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for yourself. In conclusion, owning a
house
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rather than renting
one
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is an important decision for many
people
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because we have to take financial
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problems
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, traditional values,
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and building
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a family into consideration. I recommend that we need to make some plans before we confirm
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the final
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decision.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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