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The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home for work, education or shopping. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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With the significant increase in population in big
cities
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, the rods
traffic
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 has increased.
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 I believe that affording the main life needs
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 as schools, malls and employment opportunities in every single town will reduce the amount of car usage, Some
people
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 believe that
this
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 solution does not change
traffic
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both points of view with examples and evidence. It is obvious that schools are the key factor in
traffic
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. To illustrate, when a family has more than a single kid, they need to travel to many destinations using the rods, so they have participated in involving more cars on a daily basis.
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, if the educational camps are available near the houses, students will walk to the school
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 of using cars.
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, malls and shopping centres are the essential reason that makes
people
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 travel.
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, since most
people
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 around the world travel far distances to buy the things that are not available next to the theme, building shopping centres in many help to avoid the
traffic
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 on main roads. Contrary to what I believe, many
people
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 found that traffics is a normal human issue in the
cities
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.
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 their arguments,
people
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 can not live in the same area everyday humans, so
that is
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 the normal behaviour in humans.
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, the government should develop more roads to prevent
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 in big
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.
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, the number of
people
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 who will use specific roads can not be determined, so the mentioned solution could be efficient but
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 there is no guarantee that the number of cars will be reduced. Government should plan carefully to solve the problem in the
cities
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.
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