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The woman`s place is in the kitchen. To what extent do you agree?

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Many argue that a female's place is in the
kitchen
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 because they believe it's her duty and responsibility towards her husband and children.Others disagree, thinking
women
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 have a higher meaning
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then
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 just cooking, cleaning ,and
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such
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other things. I think every
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women
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woman
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 should decide on her own what she wants to do in her life . The main reason why some believe that a woman's place is in the
kitchen
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 is culture and traditions that have been passed down by a number of generations making it much more difficult to bring in a new concept of
women
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.
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, many countries in Africa value
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 traditions and will disown their daughters or maybe even kill them for bringing shame by not following these harsh traditions.Another reason could be how simple it is ,by getting the girl a husband that she cooks for parents can rest assured that their daughter is safe,rather than having her in a faraway college not knowing what she's doing.
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, many females believe that staying in the
kitchen
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 is torture, and shouldn't be forced to do
such
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 a thing.
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Instead
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 they should be studying or searching for their special talent and providing for themselves,and a large number of
women
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 have already proved that it is possible.
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, the famous Sireina Willams who is a pro tennis player, makes a large amount of money, so she's able to depend on herself. In conclusion, a female's place in the
kitchen
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 is simply old culture,and people should respect a
women
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's right to what she wants in her own life.
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