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in their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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With the advent of the current mass of advertisements, a vast majority of companies adopt a profound competition, asserting solely to what extent their
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 are upgraded.
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, I believe that
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 poses a negative feature of marketing advancement. At the outset, when marketing depends on the notion of their
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 are just new, without exposing any other privileges. It is most likely because
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 are fixating a great deal of interest in purchasing the exotic and the newest
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.
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, the current public atmosphere which is riddled with innovation and creativity,
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instigates a plethora of
people
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 toward acquiring whatever is the most advanced
goods
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 in the retails.
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, business leaders rely on
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 perspective to market
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. In my opinion,
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 to grab more demands
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 is devoid of transparency and poses considerable negativities. Because companies should ensure frankly all
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’ specifications. Not only the
quality
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 but
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 the product conditions, properties and features. Eventually, the buyers make
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 what is the most adequate for their requirements.
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, sometimes,
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 need
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 with less
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 for a specific purpose, that does not require upgraded
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.
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, every standard of
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 has its particular customer.
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 companies should be thoroughly advertising a wide scale of demands.
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, after discussing the reasons behind why entrepreneurs and leaders assert that their
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 are upgraded,
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 the audience paying attention to the newest innovation and eccentric
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.
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, I believe that leaders should exhibit a variety of specifications with different
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 standards , depending on the newest
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 to instigate
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 for
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 is a negative approach
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 advertisements.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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