When children start school , teachers have more influence than parents on their intellectual and social development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often thought that

teachers

have a great influence on both intellectual and social aspects of

children

’s development when they

being

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school

. In my opinion ,

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agree with

this

point of view because

teacher

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teachers

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teach them how to raise their intellect in

school

and

also

how to build a relationship with a person

Firstly

, in

school

teachers

teach

children

practical

exercise

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exercises

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and laboratory experiments which help them understand the experiments and significantly help increase their

problem solving

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problem-solving

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,reasoning and thinking logic .

Teacher

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The teacher

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will teach

students

the way how to answer the question in the problem which will make the

children

understand the nature of the problem.

For example

chemical

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the chemical

a chemical

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teacher

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teachers

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will teach the reason why the molecules are linked together and how to separate them , they

also

teach the

children

how to make the chemicals which will make them understand

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nature. So

teachers

have a great impact on

children

intellectually.

Finally

, when

children

come to

school

teachers

can help

students

participate in

school

activities

such

as group

dance

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dances

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, fun

activities

, etc. Those

activities

help the

children

improve

social

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the social

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skills that they will need in the future.

Also

school

teachers

will teach civics education courses to help

children

have a better understanding of society .

For instance

teachers

teach

children

how to join social

activities

, they will help them get on well with everyone or they will teach

children

about some social aspects.

This

is necessary for the

students

because they will very

need

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much need

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it in the future. So

that

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apply

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the teacher

a teacher

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teacher

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teachers

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also

have

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a great influence in

help

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helping

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children

have a good social skill

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it is clear that

teacher

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teachers

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have more impact on

students

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students'

student's

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live

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apply

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than their

parent

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parents

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ensure

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ensuring

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they are

well developed

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well-developed

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socially and intellectual

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