The map shows the changes to a residence hall between 2010 and the present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map shows the changes to a residence hall between 2010 and the present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps illustrate how the layout of
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housing building changed over the course of 13 years, beginning in 2010. In general,
this
place changed substantially over the period.
In particular
, there are more private rooms than in the past. On the left side of the map, the hall in 2010 included one
kitchen
, one bathroom and living
room
, three study/bedrooms and one main hall. The main entrance was located in the west and opposite the bedroom. The
kitchen
was in the middle of two study/bedrooms.
Besides
, the living
room
was situated in the north and surrounded by a garden.
In addition
, the bathroom was opposite the
kitchen
and private
room
. On the right side of the map, the remarkable transformation is that a garden is replaced by
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car parking.
Moreover
, the bedrooms are extended from 3 to 5 rooms.
Additionally
, in the hallway, a private
room
is constructed near the private
room
.
Furthermore
, the
kitchen
has been expanded to serve as a social area for all residents, and the living
room
is converted into a bedroom.
Finally
, the bathroom is unchanged.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.

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